Bài tham khảo Writing Task 2 - Ngày thi 07/01/2017

Chào các bạn,

Đề thi đầu tiên của năm 2017 thuộc chủ đề Education, các khóa học trực tuyến có thể giúp chúng ta thuận tiện hơn trong việc học tập mọi lúc mọi nơi, nhưng đồng thời một số khác lại muốn đến lớp để có sự tương tác trực tiếp theo cách truyền thống.

Dưới đây sẽ là một bài mẫu để các bạn nắm được một số ý của việc học trực tuyến.

Ta bắt đầu thôi!

 

I. BÀI LÀM MẪU 

 

"Some universities offer online courses as an alternative to classes delivered on campus. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?"

 

Education - specifically tertiary one - has long been a matter of public concern for its profound impacts on people’s life. Being provided with various technology breakthroughs, universities around the world have come up with the idea of granting students to take part in a new form of course, distant learning courses in particular. In my point of view, this newborn type of education will bring both benefits and detriments to both participating undergraduates as well as the society in general.

 

There is no denying that having the ability to learn over a far distance is beneficial in many ways. To commence with, learners can enjoy obtaining knowledge at their convenience, whenever or however they feel like since online courses can provide them with valuable lectures over the Internet. One simply just has to schedule their study time in accordance with their daily timetable, not the other way around, which is very likely to be suitable for nowadays fast-paced, flexible lifestyle. Moreover, online courses participants do not have to commute to their classrooms at all, but instead turning any room in their house into one, as long as electronic devices are present. The society, in addition, will thank this contemporary approach for saving a variety of unnecessary cost namely travel, facility and other anonymous ones, thus benefiting the economy as a whole.

 

On the other hand, there remain several obvious hassles to this advanced method. Highly promising as it seems, but learning process will never be integral, not without a true face-to-face communication between lecturers and lecturees. There will always be questions need answering during the lectures, and with online courses there has not been any really efficient solution to this problem. Another point worth considering is the proliferation of unqualified alternative courses, which offer no real help apart from fraud lessons to scam money from learners, thus hindering the country’s development.

 

In conclusion, although over-the-Internet courses can provide people with ample blessings, its limitations should never be overlooked. One should implement suitable curriculum to yield best results and hamper such disadvantages.

 

II. NHẬN XÉT CỦA GIÁO VIÊN

 

Task Response: 6.0

- Body 1 phân tích đầy đủ advantages với dẫn chứng thuyết phục

- Body 2 cần bổ sung thêm thông tin dẫn cụ thể hơn về ảnh hưởng của fraud lessons đến country’s development

Coherence & Cohesion: 7.0

- 3 phần của bài thống nhất nên bài có tính mạch lạc cao (opening: both benefits and detriments, body 1: advantages & body 2: disadvantages, conclusion: blessings and limitations)

- Các ý nhỏ trong mỗi đoạn body đều bổ sung cho nhau và chứng minh cho topic sentence

- Dùng từ nối đúng chỗ và đa dạng: to commence with, moreover,  on the other hand, another point worth considering

 

Lexical Resources: 8.0

- Sử dụng từ vựng nâng cao phù hợp với chủ đề online education: tertiary, distant learning courses, commute, electronic devices, face-to-face communication, alternative courses, fraud lessons, scam money, curriculum

- Ngoài ra còn có nhiều từ vựng học thuật khác được sử dụng chính xác: public concern, profound, detriment, commence, obtain, contemporary, hassle, limitation, integral, proliferation, hinder, ample, overlook, implement, hamper

 

Grammatical Range & Accuracy: 7.0

-Sử dụng đa dạng cấu trúc ngữ pháp nâng cao: tense (present perfect, future), ­past participle, relative clause, concession (although, as it seems), passive voice (provided, need answering)

- Lỗi ngữ pháp lặt vặt: unnecessary costs, there remains, questions which need, bỏ “but” trong “Highly promising as it seems, but learning process will never be”, the best results

- Câu hay nhất:

+ One simply just has to schedule their study time in accordance with their daily timetable, not the other way around, which is very likely to be suitable for nowadays fast-paced, flexible lifestyle.

+ Moreover, online courses participants do not have to commute to their classrooms at all, but instead turning any room in their house into one, as long as electronic devices are present.

+ Another point worth considering is the proliferation of unqualified alternative courses, which offer no real help apart from fraud lessons to scam money from learners, thus hindering the country’s development.

 

OVERALL: 7.0